First Draft Complete at 40k: Flora’s Last Chance for Magic

How do you celebrate finishing a first draft?

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I like to do it with cake….

Flora finished fanfare: from Vanessa’s Book of Awesome Things – Challenge from 30 at 30, number 18: “pie/cake in the face”

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When I started the first draft: 4/13/15
When I finished the first draft: 8/8/15
Total days to completion: 117 days or 3 months, 26 days

What I did differently in writing this novel: after writing the first chapter and the summary I wrote a complete outline

The first chapter: I rewrote several times

Fun fact: This novel is based on the short story Magicas Quotient I wrote in May of 2014 and submitted to WOTF second quarter in 2015. I was inspired to write it into a middle grade fantasy novel after reading Sara Supernatural by the local author Tiffany Belcher.
Total number of words in Flora’s Last Chance for Magic draft one: 40,283

The last two sentences of the manuscript:

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The aftermath of the celebration:

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Check out the video from the event!

Thanks to Paul for taking video and cake to the face.

Flora’s Last Chance for Magic – WIP progress update

Flora’s Last Chance for Magic: (working summary)

Flora wanted to be an artist, but artists without strong magic are not taken seriously. Flora has to find her magic, but every time she tries something new it backfires. Her best friend Sebastian is not concerned with magic, only finding his real parents and Flora has a hard time taking him seriously. Magic is everything. Magic is important. Magic is how you are adopted. Sebastian was adopted before he got his magic because he had potential. Flora has no potential, only a love of art, and no prospective parents will want to adopt her. Stuck in a group home, Flora’s only chance for a future is to discover what’s been inside herself all along, and it’s not just magic.


Progress Update: Flora is at about 25k words! Projected word count is between 40-60k, so I’d say I’m about halfway done writing Flora’s Last Chance for Magic. Yay! I’m fairly certain I’ve nailed down the title, what do you think? I kept forgetting if it was Flora Finds her Magic or Flora’s Last Chance for Magic, but I like the latter better. What do you think?

Writing: As I stated, Flora is at approximately 25k words. I’ve been editing heavily the beginning with my critique group and editing as I go by myself. I also wrote a fairly concise outline that’s helping me stay on track and helping Flora’s first draft to be as excellent as it can.

Cover: I flirted with a website called selfpubbookcovers.com, do you guys like this one linked here for the cover?

Beta Readers: I have enough beta readers for my projected two rounds of beta reading, but would always love a few more. If you’re interested in reading this lovely middle grade sci fi/fantasy book, let me know.

Marketing: I have some great back end things for this book, such as book questions, a fun magic/career aptitude test that anyone can take, and a genetic abilities scale research paper report. I have not yet started marketing for this book, however, my plan is to submit it to a few publishers that accept unsolicited manuscripts and perhaps the Amazon Breakthrough Novel Award Contest. Know any great publishers for this type of book? I’d love to know!


Flora’s Last Chance for Magic Snippet from Chapter five:

Flora left Seb’s house well before her curfew so she would have enough time to walk across town back to Last Chance. She didn’t want to take the public bus, because people stared at her. Walking had become habit for Flora and she relished being outdoors. The greens were so green and the browns were quite brown. Sebastian was really cool and Flora was glad he had decided to welcome her into his house and to be her work partner for the genealogy project.

Sebastian only knew a few things about his real parents and Flora didn’t think he had enough information to go on to find them. He had explained the genetic magical matching principle to her and she kind of understood it now. It would be super easy to match Seb up to his parents once he got his magic. She was amazed he wasn’t as anxious as she was to get her magic, since it could help him find his parents and he really wanted to find them.

His adoptive parents were like the Pr’aps that came around every once in a while looking to adopt a kid with good magical potential. Flora could see that they weren’t good parents for Seb, but they were probably just disappointed in their investment. Seb was good at nothing. He had tried almost everything and shown no propensities for any particular specialty. If he got his magic, it would be a tossup what he did in life. If you got magic late in life you didn’t get the choice of a career, though, society chose for you.

Flora would not let that happen. She needed her magic. Without it, she couldn’t be an artist.

 

Beta readers wanted! Signup on my blog to be a beta reader for my WIP Donuts in an Empty Field (For the Love of Donuts Book 1). Donuts will be available for beta reading by the end of this summer.

Donuts in an Empty Field (For the Love of Donuts Book 1) Description:

Letting go of anger is life’s greatest challenge.

Vanessa Smith hasn’t been the same since her father’s death. A hero until the end, he died saving a restaurant owner’s wife and son from a burning building. Nessa has always blamed the boy, Ben, for her loss, and her thoughts are consumed with ways to make him as miserable as she is.

Nichole Adams knows Nessa can never heal until she learns to let go of her hatred, but bringing back her best friend is proving more difficult than she could’ve imagined. In a last ditch effort to break Nessa’s obsession, Nichole hopes signing up for the local food challenge is just the thing to bust her out of her shell.

A single choice defines the road ahead for Nessa. Doing the right thing isn’t easy, but living with the consequences of doing nothing might be worse.


 

Donuts in an Empty Field (For the Love of Donuts Book 1) Excerpt from Chapter 6, The Food Challenge:

I hesitate. I think I know where we’re going. I can’t. I stomp on the brake and turn the wheel hard to the right and pull into a side street. A car honks behind me, the sound disappearing into the night ahead of us. They are probably going to the same restaurant. The same place.

I’m not going there.

“Say it,” Nichole juts her chin out as she leans toward me, her arms crossed.

“I just. You know what happened. We can’t.”

“It’s time. Stop being a crybaby. Do you need me to drive?” she makes a move as if to slide over the gear shift.

I didn’t realize I had started crying. I wipe my sleeve across my eyes and stare down.

“No,” I whisper.

I put the car into reverse and back out, the tears coming faster and faster. The place I swore I would never go back to and I never would have because it burned down years ago. And now. I pull back out onto the road carefully, breathing deep, and watch the sign edge closer and closer to me. The words blur together and I can’t read them. It screams death and misplaced tragedy. I look away as I pull into the lot. There are few spots available and I pull into one of the last ones. The hollow memory of an empty lot screams inside my head. Nichole hops out of the car but I remain rigid in my seat, my hands shaking in my lap.

“I don’t think I can,” I say to myself.

But we’re here and Nichole is opening my door, reaching across my chest to unbuckle my seat belt and pulling me out of the car. She grabs the keys and locks the door, pocketing them herself. I can’t move.

“This will be good for you. I promise,” her voice is compassionate and understanding, but her actions are speaking loud and clear and it hurts.

I don’t fall for it.

“No,” I say staunchly, planting my heels like an insolent child.

“Please?”

“No!” I say louder.

Nichole grabs my arm and forcefully drags me away from the car. I have the urge to grab hold of it for dear life, but instead let my feet drift after Nichole, her arm firmly gripped on mine. I avoid looking at the large sign, but can feel the glow of the letters mocking me and my pain.

Nichole shoves me inside the main hallway.

“Is she okay?” the guy who opened the outer door asks.

“I’m fine,” I say without prompting. It’s an echo in my mind from my past self.

When my dad died six years ago and everyone kept asking, “how are you, Vanessa?” I would say that same weak phrase. Over and over and over until I was sick of it. Sick of the overused under-meant phrase and sick of them using my full name to distance themselves from what happened.

“You tricked me,” I turn to stare Nichole straight in the eyes.

“Look. I know this was hard on you, but you were going to learn about it one way or another,”

“What is this, immersion therapy? I hate you,”

I turn to go, but Nichole has yet to let go of my arm and yanks me back. I fall to the ground, tears falling down my cheeks again.

She leans over to look me in the eyes. I notice several other people inside the restaurant staring at us through the second and inner door. As small voice inside my head tells me that they’ve rebuilt the damn double doors. The interested strangers don’t come out to help. Typical. Everyone is always so concerned for their own selves. But not my Dad. He was always concerned with everybody else.

I look up at the ceiling to avoid Nichole’s gaze, but my eyes fall on something else. I gasp and jump to my feet, running to the wall for a better look. It’s my Dad. His face beams out at me. The picture was taken the day he died and there are burns up and down his cheeks. His hair is wild and dark with ash. His last lucid moment before falling into a coma. He must have been in so much pain. Burns covered more than half his body. But he still smiled. Happy with what he’d done, what he had accomplished. Was saving a life on his bucket list? Was dying young?

“See,” Nichole says to me.

I take in the rest of what’s on the wall. His picture rests within an article. It’s dated several days ago, the day after the Incident. Local Hero Saved Owner’s Wife and Son. They Decided to Rebuild their Restaurant in his Name. I stop reading.

“What’s this place called?” I demand.

I turn to face the outer door and squint through the thick glass to see the large sign. Hero’s Bar and Grill.


To be a Beta:

Here’s what I’ll need from you:

  • You need to be honest and bold and willing to give any criticisms
  • Be familiar with fiction and YA
  • Be a reader and/or a writer
  • Be able to give real critique and forthright assessment of the manuscript
  • Be able to evaluate with depth and/or breadth
  • Be able to find weak spots
  • I’m not looking for line editing, but critique on plot, character development, storyline, etc.

**You won’t hurt my feelings. You can tell me anything and everything. Better now than after it’s published, right?**

Here’s what you’ll get from me:

  • A formatted version of the novel (pdf/doc/ePub)
  • I’m also a reader so if you have a book out I will see if it’s something I’d like and may put it in my review pile
  • I will give serious consideration to every comment, suggestion, and question you pose
  • I will thank you profusely!
  • I would love to give you a small token of my appreciation if you would like ($5 gift card to Amazon)
  • I have 2 other novels I’d love to give you a copy of if you’d like
  • When I create swag packs/marketing materials/cool things associated with my books I’ll give you one/some

To signup: fill out the contact form below and I will add you as a beta reader and send you a copy in the format requested when it’s available, depending on the book(s) you chose.

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Beta Readers Wanted!

Beta readers wanted! Signup on my blog to be a beta reader for either of my WIPs Donuts in an Empty Field (For the Love of Donuts Books) or Flora Finds Her Magic. Donuts will be available for beta reading this summer and Flora will be available for beta reading this fall.

 

For the Love of Donuts: (working summary)

Best friends Nichole and Vanessa work through life, death and the local food challenge   In the moment you have to choose between doing what is right and letting go of anger, what will you choose to do? Nessa has harbored anger at the son of the local restaurant, where her father rushed into an accidental fire to save him and died from complications. Nessa has never forgiven the boy, but will have to let go of her anger in order to save herself and the boy again.

Flora Finds Her Magic: (working summary)

Flora wanted to be an artist, but artists without strong magic are not taken seriously. Flora has to find her magic, but every time she tries something new it backfires. Her best friend Sebastian is not concerned with magic, only finding his real parents and Flora has a hard time taking him seriously. Magic is everything. Magic is important. Magic is how you are adopted. Sebastian was adopted before he got his magic because he had potential. Flora has no potential, only a love of art, and no prospective parents will want to adopt her. Stuck in a group home, Flora’s only chance for a future is to discover what’s been inside herself all along, and it’s not just magic.

 

Here’s what I’ll need from you:

  • You need to be honest and bold and willing to give any criticisms
  • Be familiar with fiction and YA
  • Be a reader and/or a writer
  • Be able to give real critique and forthright assessment of the manuscript
  • Be able to evaluate with depth and/or breadth
  • Be able to find weak spots
  • I’m not looking for line editing, but critique on plot, character development, storyline, etc.

 

**You won’t hurt my feelings. You can tell me anything and everything. Better now than after it’s published, right?**

 

Here’s what you’ll get from me:

  • A formatted version of the novel (pdf/doc/ePub)
  • I’m also a reader so if you have a book out I will see if it’s something I’d like and may put it in my review pile
  • I will give serious consideration to every comment, suggestion, and question you pose
  • I will thank you profusely!
  • I would love to give you a small token of my appreciation if you would like ($5 gift card to Amazon)
  • I have 2 other novels I’d love to give you a copy of if you’d like
  • When I create swag packs/marketing materials/cool things associated with my books I’ll give you one/some

To signup: fill out the contact form below and I will add you as a beta reader and send you a copy in the format requested when it’s available, depending on the book(s) you chose.

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Thank you for your response. ✨

Contest – Chance to Win $5 and/or $50 – Just Read and Review!

Hello Blog Readers!

This is Rachel Barnard here. I’m hosting several contests on my blog here I wanted to let you know about. I wanted to give back to the readers and support great Indie authors, so I’ve come up with a contest to do both!

My first type of contest runs new monthly; with one in June, July, August, September, October, and November. All you have to do is purchase a book! Not just any book, though, one from my reviews list that I’ve rated 4.5 stars or higher.

I’ll be adding new books to choose from every week. You have until the end of the month to provide proof of purchase and you’ll be entered to win a $5 Amazon gift card. Sweet yeah?

I’m also hosting a $50 Amazon gift card contest! All you have to do is write a review of three stars or higher for one of the books you purchased from my list.


 

Here’s the $50 contest:

 $50 Amazon Gift Card Drawing: Entries Open June Now Until December 31, 2015

Leave a review of 3 stars or higher of any of those 4.5 rated or higher books now until the end of the year to get entered into a drawing to win a $50 Amazon gift card. Help support Indie authors!


If you don’t know what book to choose, I’ll even match you! Just fill in the following form:

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email address provided will only be used to send possible book matches and I will not use it for any other purpose.


 

Be sure to check out my Contest Page on my blog for more details and throughout the year to enter the new contest every month!

Maple Valley Days!

What are you up to this weekend?

I hope you’re coming down to Maple Valley to support FreeValley Publishing at Maple Valley Days and get some great books!

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Maple Valley Days
06/12/15 – 06/14/15
Cost: Free

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FreeValley Publishing will host a booth at the 2015 Maple Valley Days from June 12-14, 2015. Come visit the FVP booth and check out other Maple Valley local favorite vendors.

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Guest Review Post – At One’s Beast by Rachel Barnard reviewed by Sheri J. Kennedy

Sheri J. Kennedy is the author of Secret Order of the Overworld under pen name Kennedy J. Quinn.You may have seen some of her images or read some of her blog posts on her blog SheriJKennedyRiverside. She participates in both local events (such as the Bard & Starlet Radio Hour at Boxley’s in North Bend) and nationwide events (Such as with SnoBoot SkethhCats in the Sketchbook Project and the A to Z Challenge). For more about Sheri, visit her blog at sherijkennedyriverside.wordpress.com

The following is Sheri J. Kennedy’s review of At One’s Beast, available here from Amazon. Thanks Sheri for you thoughtful review of At One’s Beast. 

AT ONE’S BEAST is billed as a fairy tale twist and a low fantasy. I think it elevates both sub-genres by taking the basics of a moral tale and adding rich psychological complexity and atmosphere.

First, let me say, I was ‘in’ immediately and was driven to keep reading to the end – always key to a great read!
It starts with fairly traditional basics of Zos absorbing all the hate and evil of the town, and Alcina moving from fear and wanting to take him down, to seeing that he is something more. But the way the journey unfolds is uniquely modern from my perspective. For one, there’s a tricky twining of three characters that create a love triangle with Aethon. He is supposedly a friend, but has a fierce or even controlling streak that is a definite character flaw. Zos, while supposedly dangerous, shows gentleness and encourages Alcina’s strength. He is fearsome but magnetic in his caring and vulnerability.

Alcina, while having fears and showing her impetuous youthfulness, comes from a general stance of strength and independence that makes the reader believe she will conquer the beast. But as she spends time with Zos and on her own away from her family and community, she shows a vulnerability to love of nature, adventure, and love in general. Instead of making her seem weaker, her genuine emotion and new experiences develop her into her own woman – not Zos’. That’s not trite or typically fairy tale black and white. When she then comes to appreciate Zos, it makes her even stronger in my eyes and she lives and breathes instead of being a one dimensional fairy tale ‘princess-type’ heroine.

The only weakness to the tale I thought was the townsfolk, especially families, seem a little too hostile toward Alcina. This is chalked up to the evil influence, like a spell on them, so I can let it go. It’s just that all the other emotion in the story is so realistically supported that this actual fairy tale simplification of that point seems out of place in comparison. (Kind of a back-handed compliment!)

There is a lovely mix of grey tones throughout this story. There is a well-crafted atmospheric quality to the world – kind of an abstraction that allows complex contemplation while the clear action proceeds without dropping the reader for a single moment.

After reading Barnard’s debut novel, ATAXIA AND THE RAVINE OF LOST DREAMS, I was interested to see where this promising young author would go next. AT ONE’S BEAST exceeded my expectations and is very well developed. It’s a solid work that I would highly recommend.

St. James Espresso has New Books by Local Authors!

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Anywhere near Kirkland, WA and need a good book or some great coffee? You can get some books by local authors and coffee at a local shop at St. James Espresso.

I was also at last Saturday’s Release Party for Jeffrey Cook’s Third Dawn of Steam novel, the anthology Sound and Fury he has a story in, and AJ Downey’s newest release in her series.

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As both a reader and a writer I absolutely love these types of physical meet and greet and eat events. You can have one on one conversations with real writers and get signed copies of books (of which I did both). Thanks A.J. Downey, Jeffrey Cook, and the AFK for this lovely event last Saturday, can’t wait for the next author event at the AFK coming up in June.

Norwescon!

Norwescon is still going on, hop on down to get your FreeValley Publishing or Sechin Tower or Jolene Loraine’s books at our booth in the Dealer’s Room.

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Previous four photos courtesy of Kennedy J. Quinn, author of SECRET ORDER OF THE OVERWORLD

 

Did you see me at con? … Probably not because this is what I looked like.

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You still can’t see me?

Book Review: Free-flowing Stories by FreeValley Publishing Authors

Free-flowing Stories by FreeValley Publishing Authors

An anthology published by FreeValley Publishing (11/01/14)

• CAN’T STOP SINGING by Kathleen Gabriel

“The music was loud, and she had to participate.” (Page 2).

She has an earworm that won’t let go and her life is fast consumed by the music in her head that she has to sing and sometimes dance to, until she can no longer hear herself. Can’t Stop Singing is a whimsical piece of writing that takes a small annoyance to the farthest reaches of the imagination. What happens if the songs in your head don’t ever stop?

• DARK DESCENSIONS by Kennedy J. Quinn

“When you remove free will, you remove restoration and leave vindictive judgment.” (Page 15).
“Truth will come, but it must be embraced through trust and understanding.” (Page 23).

The men of the government of Overseers butt heads with the council of the Sisterhood’s Underseers in the justice against a man who committed the vile act of rape. When one Sister sends the man Underneath she starts the political war between the Overseers and Underseers. This short prequel to Secret Order of the Overworld tells the story of how the turmoil in the Overworld really began and will pull you into a world of multiple dimensions and variable morals.

• DESIRÉE by David S. Moore

“‘RejuveMates rebuilds these women’s bodies, but in doing so it steals their souls.’ I knew then that I had to do something.” (Page 38).

RejuveMates sucks Dr. Brown into the allure of the subjects’ spells, their eternal beauty, and finally, their lack of free will. Thoughts of Desirée distract Dr. Brown from his own wife and family until he is convinced he has to and can do something for her. When people become a commercial commodity, like RejuveMates has done to these women, the company is questioned regarding its morals and taking away the women’s freedom of choice. Their argument is that they’ve given these otherwise destined for poverty and poor life choices women a resurrection and rebirth. David Moore describes this moral anxiety within Dr. Brown in a fascinating matter and the world he has built around this phenomenal genetic technology is wholly intriguing.

• A REASON TO SING by Victoria Bastedo

“…there were times when stubborn men were wrong.” (Page 66).
“In Shenandya the trees were the world, and the Wildenbury tree was the height of mystic focus. And now the Wildenbury trees were singing, pouring out their non-human voices as if sound was a river draining from a spout. All over the village people were stunned with amazement.” (Page 52).

Lewolenan has failed to pass the physical testing required to be a scout for Shenandya, but he is determined not to fail when his overbearing father tells him to find the reason the trees sing. This is a short companion story to Roots Entwine by Victoria Bastedo and tells a tale of acceptance and standing up for what one believes and in one’s self. Bastedo creates a fairy tale like world in Shenandya that is magical to behold.

• NIGHT OF STARS by Stephen J. Matlock

“People in Windmill, like people everywhere, loved to hear themselves complimented for their perspicacity.” (Location 2013).
“Money’s good for one thing-buying things-but you can’t buy friendship. You have to earn it…” (Location 1660).

Henry valentine is twelve, not a child anymore but not quite a man in the summer of 1951. He lives in Windmill, Texas, where people hung on every word of the preacher and the heat of the summer suffocated and turned minds to less acceptable notions. This was a time of religion, racism, and for Henry, it’s his coming of age story. The POV switches between Henry and Benjamin, much like in the novel this short story is a prequel of: Stars in the Texas Sky.

• ATAXIA AND THE GIRL OF LOST DREAMS by Rachel Barnard

“Be brave, girls. Take every opportunity you can.” (Location 2382).

The members of the government resistance group, Ataxia, think that MC – just a girl from a small village – can infiltrate an elite Academy, pose as a student, graduate with honors, be placed in a high up position in the military command, and work from the inside to advance the Ataxian cause. She wants to do it because she wishes to restore balance to a society in which the government favors the rich and persecutes the poor. This short story is the prequel to Ataxia and the Ravine of Lost Dreams and tells the story in the days leading up to where the novel begins.

• MIDDAY’S MADNESS by T. Tommia Wright

“If someone tells you not to go somewhere, be daring. Go!” (Location 2516).

Jalem Vitalma is young enough to slip away unseen, but not old enough to be considered worthy of being taught, until she happens upon a wounded stranger who guides her through the art of healing. This prequel to T. Tommia Wright’s upcoming fantasy novel, Escorting in Twilight, is full of magic and a young girl who has an inquisitive mind and a yearning for knowledge. Get caught up in the fantasy world spun by Wright, where magic prevails.

• DAWN OF STEAM: THE RAT KING by Jeffrey Cook

“While unlikely to see a much wider circulation, the daily chronicling assignments of a small boy along for a great journey provide a perspective eon the trip, on the day-to-day life aboard the airship, and on the crew themselves that is not present elsewhere.” (Location 2580).

From the assignments of Matthew Fisher-Swift, ward of the Captain, on his attempts to capture the Rat Baronet in a ship in the early 1800’s. There are also some accounts from Harriet Wright. If the rat continues to live, it may well chew through enough to damage the dirigible and threaten the safety of the crew aboard, giving much importance to Matthew’s mission. This very focused story is delightful to read and tells the story of one minor character from Jeffrey Cook’s Dawn of Steam trilogy.

Links for more information:

FreeValley Publishing’s blog

Goodreads

Amazon