Book Review: Dawn of Steam: First Light by Jeffrey Cook

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Dawn of Steam: First Light by Jeffrey Cook

A Steampunk Novel published February 27th 2014 through CreateSpace Independent Publishing Platform



 Dawn of Steam is essentially about the preparations and flight of a dirigible full of travelers who are trying to find a northern path from the Atlantic to the Pacific.They attempt to prove or disprove the convictions and claims in Dr. Bowe’s journal of his own journey. The travelers are made up of hunters, fighters, a map maker and journalist, women, and the insatiable adventurer Sam Bowe, who “seems to thrill in living in the spur of the moment, and throwing herself into danger and excitement.” (page 294). Their journey is best described in the last part of the novel, on pg 295, “It is a difficult path, and many skills are required, including good guides, gifts for the native peoples – and ideally someone who speaks or can learn their tongues – and some talent for river navigation, but the entire way can be traveled without need of airships. That we did so under great duress, and still in excellent time is only more testament to the company you have collected here.”



Steampunk, Travel, Journey, Journals, Dirigible, Airship, Mechanical Creature, Gun Fights, Social Norms


My Review:

To preface my review I must state that I had never before read a book written in the “epistolary” style embraced by Jeffrey Cook in his novel, Dawn of Steam: First Light. This means that the main character narrates through journal entries and letters. He writes these to his fiancee back home about their journey. At first mention of what epistolary meant (a novel written as a series of documents, according to Wikipedia), I was highly skeptical that this technique would be engrossing for the reader. After reading the novel in its entirety, I am unconvinced that this style of writing can ever fully grab the reader’s attention and fully convey excitement. This style lent itself to multiple issues, the first of which was the lengthy descriptions of characters and pieces of equipment (such as how to re-load a rifle on page 53). The letter writer, Gregory Conan Watts, completely describes a person, sometimes spending pages and pages in his descriptions, instead of letting the character’s personality come through the pages of the novel organically as in a regular novel. The character descriptions were so long, I thought Watts was being obsessive or compulsive in his need to over-describe every character.

The epistolary format contains multiple forms of documents and Jeffrey Cook included journal entries, letters, and newspaper clippings. I enjoyed having the variety, however, some thoughts were repeated in different forms of documents, such as how Sir James loses (Watts suspects on purpose) during card games. This might be a redundancy by the author by accident or perhaps is an acknowledgement that our narrator does not remember he has already written about this event, which is altogether quite clever though unnecessary for the reader to have to take note of twice.

As epistolary is written after the fact, any action is not entirely exciting, as it has already occurred and there is no surprise to the writer, only the description of that past surprise. I thoroughly missed being in the middle of an action sequence throughout the novel, even as Cook was able to give me some of that anxiety for the characters with several action sequences involving fight scenes. Cook gives Watts the ability to describe the action scene of the fight in such a way to completely capture my interest, for at least that part, until the bulk of the narration of their experiences on their journey begin again. Truly, the book could have started with the second part, American Colonies The Civilized West, after 90 pages of description that can be summed up by the words, “they prepared for their journey.” At that point, I did not even have a full grasp of the characters, even with the pages of description, because I had not seen them in action and couldn’t quite  put a visual to any one of them.

Even the humorous parts are dulled by the style of writing as it was ‘written’  in the early 1800’s, as such will happen when you are true to your narrator’s own writing style. I applaud Jeffrey Cook for staying so true to the time period, but I was not pleased as a reader to have to wade through the word-glutted sentences and the staunchly level tone of the writer. I wanted emotion and reaction, but I got this instead, “I will acknowledge that, expecting no such thing and quite tense in anticipation of gaining another voyager among our company, and one of such note, I was quite unready for such a thing, and startled in such a manner as to greatly amuse everyone about, and sending my chair tumbling backwards – with myself, sadly, still in residence.” (page 56). Many of the novel’s sentences are structured like this, long and comma-riddled and difficult to follow. This was another way in which the reader was hampered in connecting to the characters and the story.

Any big reveals were rendered into normalcy by Watts. When I wanted excitement, he told me that one of the main characters was actually a woman, but in such a way that it was not scandalized. I want the scandal. I want the big eruption of truth. As a reader, I want to be excited about what I’m reading.

At times, Watts graced the reader with true gems, “While he dressed up perfectly well, though nothing out of the ordinary, since he is always quite formal, Elliot Toomes and parties go together something like oil and water; they can coexist in the same rough location without ever actually blending.” (page 85). Even Miss Penn, on page 156, had a nice turn of phrase, “Sometimes an animal in a cage or trap, unable to get out, will try to pull things in.” My absolute favorite sentence, though, would have to be on pages 78-79, when Watts writes, “…the man must once have been some kind of explorer who went so far from home as to get a feel for such adventures before his mind began to fill in the darker corners of the map.”

Regarding the physical book and format, I felt that since the entire novel was made up of documents, the appearance of the book should reflect those documents. The newspaper articles should have looked like newspaper articles, perhaps ripped out of their columns. The letters should have been ink blotted and in a readable but cursive style, such as the tease on the back of the book jacket. Also, Watts mentions photos he sends with his letters. I would like to see them and think it would add greatly to the novel’s authenticity for them to be included. There were only several grammatical errors within the script and I think these could be masked within the font as mistakes by the writer. Or even spelling errors, such as “Spainish” on page 171. I attributed this error to our narrator and not the author of the novel.

I am not entirely familiar with Steampunk as a genre and what elements and rules make up any book under that category. To me, though, this steampunk novel had an element that appeared to be gratuitiously placed to make it more reminiscent of the genre, such as the Ornithopter – a mechanical beast with part of the mind of a woman or a dog. This concept seems entirely out of place with the staunch historical accuracy of the book, lending to it a sense of unreality.

Although I came to love the character Sam Bowe, I was not pleased with the way Watts described her. He continually chastises her unladylike behavior and dress, again and again. I understand this was the attitude at the time, but I feel that it is shoved in my face over and over. Cook redeems himself as the author by giving her such a heroic and epic quality but does not reveal much about her that is charming or endearing to the reader. Cook sidesteps the issue of resentment toward a ‘lady’ saving the men but I feel that the resentment is still there in the fact that Watts stresses her unseemliness in comportment. But Watts and Cook don’t stop at chastising Sam as Watts continually chastises any women in the book who don’t conform to the societal standards of the time and praises those that do. Follows are some examples:

–  “…I shall hope this letter is not too disturbing or graphic for a young woman’s sensibilities…” (pg 230)

– “Apparently expecting such a thing, and willing to put up with aiding in terrible behavior for a woman, I noticed Miss Penn tugging upon Samantha’s dress hem sufficient to catch her attention…” (page 166).

– “I know it is unseemly, and I shall hope this letter is not widely circulated at home, save what parts of it are more of adventure and less of controversy….” (page 244). When referring to Miss Bowe wearing men’s pants when navigating.

– “…for perhaps if she truly has such a gift for the manly pursuit of artifice, certainly well beyond my own understanding, then perhaps some part of her mind is entirely unsuited for womanly pursuits.” (page 97).

In fact, Sam Bowe, when thought of as a man is “.. the fading and handsome, if youthful, man.” but when thought of as a woman, she is described as an, “…undignified woman.” (page 164).



I would recommend this book to anyone who enjoys historical fiction and the epistolary writing style, steampunk, or the Luminaries by Eleanor Catton.


This novel was published through CreateSpace Independent Publishing Platform on 2/27/14 and is available on Amazon here.


TLDR Star Rating: 3.00


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Steampunk Themed Release Party for Dawn of Steam Was a Hit

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What made Jeff’s release party such a success was how much fun it was to participate. We (the readers) had a chance to dress up and hang out in a cool venue. This was no Barnes and Noble, author behind a desk, book release or signing event. This was a full on party! There were lots of friendly people and lots of books. I had a great time and I hear Jeff sold a number of books there as well (a technical measure of success). Great job Jeff at organizing such a great time for everyone.

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Any excuse to dress up and I’m in!

Norwescon Wrap Up Thoughts

I was at Norwescon last week(end) and it was quite the experience. I have never been to a con like that before. In fact the only convention I’ve really ever gone to was the recent AWP convention (more here) and that was nothing at all like Norwescon. I enjoyed myself but didn’t feel like I truly got to experience the con because I was not there at night and I didn’t know anyone but my lobby booth buddy Jeffrey Cook.

Here’s a list of the pros and cons to Norwescon for me



– Getting to see all the wonderful costumes

– Meeting people who came to our lobby booth

– Being able to talk about FVP and MVW books

– The cool vendors

– the free munchies in the Hospitality room

– People were nice and friendly

– the con environment seemed relaxed and not policing

– Valet took care of parking my car when I couldn’t find a spot

– Our booth had a lot of traffic

– I had a place to be (our booth) that I could feel safe and like I belonged to a particular spot for comfort’s sake

– I got to dress up! (and no matter what I dressed in it would not be the oddest costume out there)



– Saturday admission was $45 (I even had to pay to just man the booth)

– parking was a nightmare as by 9:00 in the morning there were no spots left

– It was raining so going outside was not happening

– Our lobby booth was hemmed in by the superfluous amount of Larpers in the neighboring booth

– The two panels I tried to go to stunk, as the presenters were not very prepared, treated the audience like morons, and cursed in front of children

– The wrap-around enclosed nature of the hotel with spread out places to go was a little unnerving for first time con-goer such as myself

Author Tuesdays: Poetry Reading in North Bend

 What a lovely night of Poetry! Thank you everyone for sharing your works as well as poetry from poets you admire/love

I shared two poems by one of my favorites Shel Silverstein: Noise Day and Shel Silverstein’s Cure for Writer’s Block


Thank you North Bend library for allowing us use of the space and endorsing Poetry and Poetry Month for this event!

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Our lovely books are displayed right alongside some of the classics in poetry

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The crowd gets ready for the readings

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27 Years a Poet

vicky bastedo (1)

Vicky Bastedo

tommia wright (3)

T. Tommia Wright

stephen matlock (1)

Stephen J. Matlock

sheri kennedy (2)

Sheri J. Kennedy

linda garcia (5)

Linda Garcia

jackie (2)

Jackie Fedyk

david moore (4)

David S. Moore

Author Thursdays: Norwescon!


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Maple Valley Writers and FreeValley Publishing authors will be hosting a booth at Norwescon in the lobby.

Rachel Barnard and her work Ataxia and the Ravine of Lost Dreams will be promoted at this event.

You can talk to her in person Saturday during the event.

What is Norwescon?

The Pacific Northwest’s premier Fantasy and Science Fiction convention.

For more information on Norwescon:

Toiling Tuesday: Maple Valley Writers December Workshop – Goals and Resolutions

Goals vs. Resolutions

Do you write out goals with deadlines in mind?
      Do you have daily goals? Weekly goals? Monthly goals?

Your goals should:

  • Be something you can control (not just “make lots of money” but “send out three query letters a month)
  • Inspire you
How to define these goals:
  • They should be measurable (not “be a better writer” but “write daily”)
  • They should be attainable (not “be the number one writer” but “get an article published in the local newspaper”)
  • They should be meaningful
Short term vs. long term measures of success
  • Do you want to measure success in terms of hours spent writing per day (or per week)?
  • Do you want to measure success in terms of pages produced or words produced per day (or week)?
  • Do you want to measure success in terms of queries submitted per week or month?
  • Do you want to measure success in terms of projects (articles, stories, or chapters) written per month or year?
What’s your writer’s bucket list?
Here is mine fantastical bucket list:
  1. Become rich and famous
  2. Write a book in every genre/type
  3. Publish my own anthology of poetry
  4. Write my autobiography
  5. Have one of my stories made into a movie
  6. Write a screenplay
  7. Write a one-hit wonder
  8. Be a top-selling, name-known author
  9. Be on talk shows about my books, as an author
  10. Sell a million copies of one of my own novels
  11. Be an inspiration to other authors
  12. Win an award
  13. Travel and do talks in other countries
Don’t forget your support! The people who can support and motivate you along the way. 
Also, don’t forget about what resources you will need to accomplish your goals!
Are you self-publishing? Take the author self-assessment worksheet to help you as you progress through your publishing experience:

Toiling Tuesdays: Authoring, Marketing, Publishing, Selling is Hard Work

The Maple Valley Writers booth at the MAple Valley Holiday Craft Fair sold several copies of the books of the two featured authors: Becky A. Benson and Rachel Barnard. For more information on the authors, check out the brag corner on the Maple Valley Writers website. To purchase Becky A. Benson’s novel, Three Short Years, click the link here. To purchase Rachel Barnard’s novel Ataxia and the Ravine of Lost Dreams, click the link here.

We had fun and met many fascinating people with their own stories to tell. Perhaps you will see their books in the future. This post is dedicated to those writers out their in Maple Valley who have important stories of their own to capture and inspire us.

Author Thursdays: Local Holiday Events With Your Favorite Local Books and Authors

Check out your local town for great local holiday bazaars, craft fairs, etc. It’s like the farmer’s market but even better!

December 7th from 10 AM to 3 PM at the Maple Valley Community Center, come support your local Maple Valley Writers and purchase their awesome novels. 

If you happen to be more North of Maple Valley, don’t despair. You can check out the Si View Community Center Holiday Bazaar 10AM to 3 PM, also on December 7th, where some of the FreeValley Publishing authors will be selling their lovely novels.

NaNo November: Events Far and Wide

NaNoWriMo Checklist

NaNo starts in just a couple of days! Do you know where you will be and what you will be writing about? Here’s your pre-Nano checklist:

  1. Signup on
  2. Pick a region
  3. Flesh out your book idea and make an outline
  4. Figure out how to work around previously scheduled events (Thanksgiving etc)
  5. Download your free scrivener trial
  6. Take advantage of other free offers! Such as your free manuscript review and First Edition Hardcover from